You'll never be free of the disease of me
I'll always make tracks in your mind
Leave footsteps and regrets and altering thoughts
Realise that I'm one of a kind
You'll never be free of the bruise that is me
I'm the blood in the veins of your eye
I'll forever reflect in the pools where you look
Rip your heart out with one little sigh
You'll never be free of the fire that is me
Fingertips blister on touch
I'll sigh in your ear when you're lonesome
And singe any other you clutch
You'll never be free of the silence of me
Trees moaning with each violent sway
While the land all around you leave pointers to me
As my essences fill up your day
You'll never be free..........................
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17 comments:
This is a beautiful poem. I've got a few things I feel like I'll never be free of.
Oooo... never be free sounds like a staker...haha
This is powerful, very visual. Lovely!
This is filled to the brim with strength, energy, YOU WILL NEVERs! I loved it.
wow so vivid and alive...love the allusions to fire, bruise and disease...each a different texture of love...the violent sway of trees is a great touch as well...
The control and domination you have created in your poem is repulsive. My prayers are that no one would ever be so bullied or violated. Brilliant imagery.... a frightful share. Thanks, Lena.
That does sound like a
curse-that-isn't-a-curse, if you see what I mean! LOL
Powerful and lyrical at the same time...
Some relationships sure can be like this. Yikes!
Hugs
?SueAnn
helena your poem, words are on fire, lady!
i love the confident, uber-boldness
of this poem - like a chant that
seeps into the blood.
That would be some deep impression that you left! Wonderful piece!
A stalkers delight...brrr! Pure ego's state of mind...You and Escher...quite a picture..you did well.
All just about perfect, but I especially liked
I'm the blood in the veins of your eye.
So cool.
=)
Oh, wicked brilliant!
Awesome writing. Love it! :)
One word, one powerful word: excellent!
I wouldn't like to get on the wrong side of you! Great write.
Oh my! What a mix of comments. I've only just got round to reading this - but sorry for being 'repulsive' folks. It is only fiction, (which I must be good at to evoke such comments)and actually quite mild in the scorned woman scenario compared to some examples I've come across - (especially on Crime and Investigation channel.....!)
....oh, and the only thing (in real life) I've dominated has been the remote for the television! And that's life...!
*whisper* remember now......it's just a poem!
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