Decidedly wary, unusually calm
Who opened the package that's me?
Sought by abusers and everyday hurt
Whose secrets dilute in the sea
Can you fathom the coldness, the annual crawl
Make a vow to a pearl so crisp
Washed up on a shore complex with aspersions
To cast away doubt in the mist
Still clutching at whispers, an idyllic like shell
Nereus prophecies turned then they fled
Tear the wrapping and bathe me in promises sweet
Then take me and denial to bed
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13 comments:
An intelligent response to the prompt...
haha great close on this lena...nereus, interesting word....ties to greek mythology right?
Great piece of work you have here Lena. Thanks for sharing it well with today's prompt.
Wow...nice work helena...love what you have done with your blog :)
Suraj
http://gamerzandwwe.blogspot.com
Love that you brought Greek mythology into your poem ... (must confess to thinking her rib cage as 'ripped' when I saw your title)
I'm going to have to look up the word nereus... I've never heard of it before. I love learning new and interesting words! Beautiful poem.
Lovely take on this beautiful image. I liked the apt reference to Nereus...
"Still clutching at whispers, an idyllic like shell
Nereus prophecies turned then they fled
Tear the wrapping and bathe me in promises sweet
Then take me and denial to bed "
Love the last stanza, excellent capture!
She may have been 'washed up' but not for long. And who did open 'the package that is me' I wonder? Lovely rhythm .
Tear the wrapping and bathe me in promises sweet
My favourite line....
The architect has detected the archetype embedded inthe image. Arch- e- type. I think the Arch represents "Archons " or devas, a type of spirit, a spirit you co- operated with , rather well !
How very clever - Nereus, the product of sea and earth known for his truthfulness.
Lena,
So many shells in this photo; the shell of the conch, the shell of the human and the shell of the tree, cast up on the beach for all to see. Perhaps by Nereus to provide a glimpse of the truth: the fleetness of life.
Wonderful poetry from you.
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