May 04, 2014

Ridden Redemptions



She often sits upon this chair, normality up in the air,
steps through thoughts, spoon feed ideas, as nipping as a hot tortilla

Spread her wings and light damnation, holy doubts for confiscation,
knowing not how to be glib, she'll make ammends for what you did

Then scavenging the few remains, she'll circle over greater plains,
not quite the gracious nor the sinner, nitpicked courses served for dinner

But there she sighs and there she sits, one of life's condemned misfits,
a delinquent doused in aftertaste, with sad tomorrows interlaced

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11 comments:

Kathe W. said...

Love those last two lines!

Jinksy said...

I agree with Kath W - those last two lines nailed it.

rel said...

whether vulture or trash man; we'd be in a hill of putrid rubbish without them, but revile them we do. A strange lot we humans.

Laurie Kolp said...

Ha! I used spoon-fed, too...

Sumana Roy said...

beautiful use of imagery and a profound close...

Optimistic Existentialist said...

"not quite the gracious nor the sinner" - love this line. Most of us are in that grey area aren't we?

brenda w said...

Lovely rhyme structure. The last two lines are sad.

Belva Rae Staples said...

This is a great piece. I think I fall into the misfit category.

Hannah said...

I love the use of rhyme and inner rhyme in this...really carries your readers. Well done!

Helena said...

Kath - wella thank you, madame - they were my faves too!

Jinksy - glad you agree....and I didn't need the use of a hammer!

Rel - absolutely, we do need to be more vulture considerate! That's life!

Laurie - lol...great minds and all that! I modified the line as I wouldn't want anyone to think we cheated!

Sumana Roy - Thank you. I'm pleased where it went, too!

Keith - we certainly are and most of us never leave the area either.

Brenda - thank you. I try my best to keep the flow of syllables even.

Belv - I am a misfit in certain areas of life, too. Hey Ho!

Hannah - then I'm honoured to be a carrier! lol

Tess Kincaid said...

My favorite of yours to date...