A family gathering, a Sunday debate
A spread of keen citruses, bright and ornate
Your hunger awaiting the green light from dad
As he seasons and juices his fresh catch of scad
Sitting adjacent, parents and sons
In happy approach, each canonical nones
Grace and a table indicative of
Pride from a father, a labour of love
Who mentions quite playfully, points with a knife
How the fruits of their loins will be needed in life
To keep the seeds handy, to burst into colour
Peeling the pith, squeezing juice from another
They'll each have a table, and gathering glow
And a orchard of offsprings, a life to bestow
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16 comments:
Well done, actually quite moving.
ha...the fruits of their loins will be needed...though dad always reminded me of that before a soccer match...smiles...really nicely done the hope of future generations and tables and tables...
Your title is great! Nicely written, and inspiringly refreshing!
Great; I loved the rhythm in this and so clever to bring fruit of the loins into it.
An orchard of off springs? Big family, that... :)
Love it :)
Yummy enough to eat! I love peeling the pith, squeezing juice from another....
Thanks!
Ooh, this is loverly.
This is beautiful. Love the cadence and rhyme.
In order to 'know myself', looking at--and seeing--nature, gives a so much more true picture. Looking 'deep down into myself' can become confusing and leads me to Pride--or the other six deadlies.
Father is right ( rather, YOU are!) in teaching sons to be aware of nature, e.g., fruits, seeds, peels, sweetness, and finally siring an orchard of offspring.
Analogy of vines, branches, etc., mustard seed, wheat, chaff; ALL are teaching tools of my Universe. As with many things, I do not have tpo look for them...they are already here, in place, waiting.
Wow! i sure write long comments!
PEACE!
A lovely rhythm to this one.... thank you .
I enjoyed this ~ quite a lot. The rhythm and rhyme perfect.
Nice deary....but when are we getting the prop up, though?
I really like the word "keen"...perfect to describe the fruit...
Great story! I loved the flow and the little comic touches!
An orchard of offspring. How wonderfully posed.
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