October 23, 2011

Versus You



The city sighs and cars collide and
    I take it in all in manic stride.
Pent up hating, gross debating
  run or spend a minute waiting.


 Traffic lures me, lights assure me,
 time for madness   to endure me
  Gridlock, trying, by and bying
someone's crying loud but surely



  Put the foot down, sidles around,
can't the motion hurry on town
 I'll twist the tries, nurse my black eyes
green says go but red defies......

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17 comments:

Mary Ann Potter said...

Oh, I loved this! Your rhyme scheme and rhythm are just perfect, uncontrived, natural.

Rubye Jack said...

This is great; one more day in the fast lande.

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

nicely done! nice take!

have a great week ahead...

JJRod'z

Jinksy said...

Those first two lines are SO spot on...

Catfish Tales said...

A playful whimsy in a not so melodic jam session - LOLOL

Berowne said...

Very enjoyable...

Brian Miller said...

this has a nice beat to it that captures the feel of the street...enjoyed for sure...

Tumblewords: said...

Delightful read!

Tess Kincaid said...

I love the notion of a city sighing...

Isabel Doyle said...

congestion blues?

Jo Bryant said...

nice one

thingy said...

I love your POV. Never been on that bastard street, but plenty like it. : )

Morning said...

some witty lines,

a fun capture of city street. masterful piece.

Lena said...

Mary Ann - a big thank and thanks for visiting my blog!

Ruby - just so!

Thanks JJ - I'll pop to yours soon!

Jinksy - awe, thank you. I know it's not too bad a write when you like the opener line!

Shers - lol....ear plug jam session!

Berowne - thank you kind Sir!

Brian - I appreciate the depth used in our poems when you visit us! How you fit it all in I've no idea - but it's well appreciated!

Isabel - congestion indeed - thick stuff, too!

Jo - thenk you me dear!

Thingy - The street labelled is the biggest one in Glasgow and choc a bloc full, road and pavements. Crossing the road is a challenge in itself. It really is a bastard!

Morning - Blessings!

Cad said...

run or spend a minute waiting

Run? what me, at my age? Not Pygmalion likely! LOL

Bee's Blog said...

Living in a city taking things in one's 'manic stride' is the norm. Great write!

Lena said...

Cad - you could always hitch a ride on Ada's back....!

Bee - thanks. Bee over to you soon!