May 23, 2010

From The Pier

This is my effort from the picture above in this week's Magpie Tales.
As I walk home late from the tracks of my past
I peer at your horizon, a soul that's so vast.
I breath in the sea air, and cry to the night
As front waves appear in the sodium light.

Under the water swim thousands of you
Temperate actions and hullabaloo.
Shifty and scared, brave, taking chances
Bullying, battling, swift primal dances.

Gathering shoals of different kinds
Colours that blend, others that blind.
Shaping your world as nature intended
Instinctively loving, a partner defended.

I could capture you all, my ultimate prize
Tossing back those I may come to despise.
With all of you fishes held under the sea
Can't one come ashore and try capturing me?


Helen said...

Sodium light ... loved these words and your Magpie!

kathew said...

This is great! Loved every line.

Oddyoddyo13 said...

This was really, really cool.

Lisa said...

But do you really want to be captured? Or do you want to swim along with one by your side?

Beautifully written.

Tumblewords: said...

Delightful read!!

joanny said...

Loved this poem and the way the words just flowed together so freely. You captured the essence of the flowing sea with your words.

Good maggie ,,,,


willow said...

Hullabaloo is just a delightful word. Well done.

Lena said...

Ah, thank you, ladies. I was a bit nervous with it being my first Maggie.

and long as he wasn't too oily and up for spawning when I was, either way would!

Anonymous said...

damn it this is good..... if I was a fish.... I would jump from the ocean and try my best

Brian Miller said...

oh, i feel this fish, she found me...and decided not to throw me back. even after 14 years tomorrow! smiles. nice magpie!

Berowne said...

>>Can't one come ashore and try capturing me? <<

And what would they use for bait? :-)

Lena said...

Berowne - anything shiny and sweet.

R. Burnett Baker said...

What a great poem to see ourselves in nature and needing to be nurtured. A fun poem, but also one with deeper meaning! ( And I didn't mean that to sound like a pun!!)

Love this!

rel said...

How wonderful and melodious to boot. a jaunty look at the priceless array of the world under the sea, know only to you, Jules Verne and me. ;)
Really beautifully done!

joanny said...


The fish breaking through the brick wall was a salmon and yes it was alright to download thanks for asking.

and a very good first magpie and a really delicious poem.


Caty said...

This was wonderful-very fun-well written!! Great magpie. It made me smile :)

Angie Muresan said...

Hullabaloo is one cool word. Your poem is wonderful!

little hat said...

I loved your last line. You oining to be part of that mysterious world. Whpo wouldn't?

Lena said...

And once again.....thank you!

RNSANE said...

I always like poetic responses to magpies! Your effort was excellent and turnabout is certainly fair play. I've often wondered if fish would like to grab the end of a pole and pull us into the depths!

My book of poetry is out - "Life's Journey" -
Poems about the things that have been important to me in my journey through life, some humorous, some sad, some that may have meaning to you as well.

Smileyfreak said...

very very nice :) love the ryhming :)

Ekanthapadhikan said...

"Can't one come ashore and try capturing me? " - Now, that's a brilliant thought. Way to go!!!

By the way, I've something waiting for you in my blog.

menopausaloldbag (MOB) said...

Well hen what a talent. I loved this oh and your post about your trip to London. I love that place!

Lena said...

MOB - Thanks so much. I'm going to try my hand at other odes, limericks, poems, ect, to the picture prompts at Magpie Tales. Quite like the creativity thing. A nice contrast to blogging blethers!

Jingle said...

awards 4 u,

nice to meet...

Wildernesschic said...

Brilliant ! xx