December 10, 2012

Tainted


The girl came from a tainted place
not sure if she'd fit in
They sneered at all her worldly signs
and where she should begin

Alien and consternated
picking up the gist 
Staring on with great abandon
slapped upon the wrist

Skies were grey and ladened with
cataclysmic ire
Foreign oxygen henceforth 
no chance to aspire

Their tongues, they may not be the same
but read upon their face
Was the wording of a thousand thoughts
to take rejection's place

The girl came from a tainted place
and knew she'd not fit in
For she breathed inside her bubble
and kept the sword within

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14 comments:

Optimistic Existentialist said...

I love the metaphors and imagery in this piece. Truly great work :)

Other Mary said...

I like the way you've gone with this. Strong rhyme and meter too.

Ginny Brannan said...

Tattoos are considered quite taboo in some cultures. I felt that foreignness, that judgement and rejection, as I read your piece.

Jon said...

wonderfully metaphoric and thought-provoking.

Jinksy said...

Next to last stanza is top notch. :)

Berowne said...

Alien and consternated; who has not experienced that feeling?

Tigerbrite said...

Sounds like the experience of a walk in. Nice work.

Helen said...

Very nice ...... love the rhyme elements!

Kelvin S.M. said...

...trying to fit in a place unknown is such a hard thing to do and really unreal to inner-self yet most people were like that... afraid to dig their own path, camouflaging to others just to get the affirmation of being part & same... excellent write and truly enjoyable to read... smiles..

Rebecca said...

Very tainted, but strong and resilient. Loved this!

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done.....i wrote one for this prompt....but haveent posted yet...cheers

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Sara McNulty said...

I'm glad you found me so that I could find you! Wonderful writing on this prompt, and I love that ending!

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