The girl came from a tainted place
not sure if she'd fit in
They sneered at all her worldly signs
and where she should begin
Alien and consternated
picking up the gist
Staring on with great abandon
slapped upon the wrist
Skies were grey and ladened with
cataclysmic ire
Foreign oxygen henceforth
no chance to aspire
Their tongues, they may not be the same
but read upon their face
Was the wording of a thousand thoughts
to take rejection's place
The girl came from a tainted place
and knew she'd not fit in
For she breathed inside her bubble
and kept the sword within
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14 comments:
I love the metaphors and imagery in this piece. Truly great work :)
I like the way you've gone with this. Strong rhyme and meter too.
Tattoos are considered quite taboo in some cultures. I felt that foreignness, that judgement and rejection, as I read your piece.
wonderfully metaphoric and thought-provoking.
Next to last stanza is top notch. :)
Alien and consternated; who has not experienced that feeling?
Sounds like the experience of a walk in. Nice work.
Very nice ...... love the rhyme elements!
...trying to fit in a place unknown is such a hard thing to do and really unreal to inner-self yet most people were like that... afraid to dig their own path, camouflaging to others just to get the affirmation of being part & same... excellent write and truly enjoyable to read... smiles..
Very tainted, but strong and resilient. Loved this!
nicely done.....i wrote one for this prompt....but haveent posted yet...cheers
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I'm glad you found me so that I could find you! Wonderful writing on this prompt, and I love that ending!
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