Little room with no view, I occupy you,
you're filled with a comfort divine.
Lain curled in your bed, dreams spin in my head
while your duvet and my legs entwine.
Our space is so neat, compact and complete,
not much scope for the notions to fall.
Bed only just fits, lamp sullenly lit,
as my silouette creeps up the wall.
The windows lay bare, as I dwell in your care,
no drapes or shades cover the moon.
Just a cloud or the stars, through the parallel bars,
bless us our joyful attune.
Some would dismay at tonality greys
surrounding this truncated cone.
No luster or lure or sheets haute couture
grands a place up to feel more like home.
With minimum space and the simplest of grace -
we crown the apartments beneath.
But I love my small home, it's where I belong
Who needs palaces or laurel wreaths?
This poem was inspired by Willow's picture prompt at Magpie Tales.
23 comments:
omg I love that bedroom?
is it really yours?
Love your description of this room. Very nicely written!
Sir T - I wish it was a room just for me....! It's my Magpie Tales group prompt - you'd be good at this!!! Did you work on the song any more?
Thanks Helen - I'm in lazy mode today so it's a bit of 'say-what-you-see' and seeing how many feminine rhymes I can get away with.
Sometimes saying what you see is just the right touch. I really enjoyed your image filled piece. Although I love the Magpie Tales prompt this poem could stand alone and be the picture. Thank you for sharing.
I did work on it a bit and then like most other things put it to the side for other matters... *grins*
oh the things we could have done in a room like that
Love the cadence and rhyme. With these words, the picture is painted and no need for a photograph. Wonderfully done.
an elegant poem describing and elegant room.
well done.
I love your poem! Perfection!
I could definitely wake up to that! Loved this one.
Such a lovely room! :)
You described the room very well. It's interesting to see people's different perspectives on it. I liked your "truncated cone."
Beautiful writing, Lena, your descriptions are a joy. This is a marvellous magpie! :)
So comfy cozy..I want to settle in there..well done!!
Just the sort of room I 'd like too.
Nice take on the Magpie Tale.
Christine
I'd be happy to have a place like that - lovely!
very descriptive indeed. nicely written
This is so beautiful, I love your descriptive words.
this is a wonderful sentiment of home. great stuff.
Your writing skill is awesome.hard to believe that you're just 15.well done :)
lovely lines filled with subtle sentiments.. i missed this on the list. thank you for sharing
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an award for you,
Happy Weekend,
Cheers!
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